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The Wine Maker
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The Wine Maker |
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Kosmic888 Junior Member
since 2009-11-01
Posts 29Vancouver Canada |
the wine maker knows no fear sets no bounds a shapeless star piercing hearts with lyrics of sound stirring life as he does crashing down laughing water into wine his words weave feeling seahorse weeping butterfly breathed into being from nectar sublime shapes floating in his vast sky of dark overflow from his vast cup of heart each grape by grace pressed with his thumbs juices flooding downward spiralling 'round along strings of light the masses swooning eternally drunk from his excesses ©2008 'Diary Of A Pen Warrior' 'we are all connected by strings of light' |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
his words weave feeling seahorse weeping butterfly breathed into being from nectar sublime shapes floating in his vast sky of dark overflow from his vast cup of heart LOVE THIS! |
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rachaelfuchsberger
since 2007-02-21
Posts 609Las Vegas, NV |
While I love the construction of how the verses physically line up on the page, I find a lack of rythmic flow here. Other than that, it's excellent imagery, and a very nice write! Goddess grant me the serenity to accept the things that I cannot change, the courage to change the things I can and the wisdom to know the difference. |
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