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Summer Blaze
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Summer Blaze |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Knowing the soft brush of my lips the way my eyes smiled in a half glaze you felt the touch of my hands on your face and the way of sighs escaping my heart. You captured so many moments and then tossed them to the wind they meant so little to you so small to someone who's presence is larger than life. I feel sorry that you are never sated and content. Perhaps at peace with nothing to pull you down or hold you close for too long. While the days passed into tears you tasted the salt and let it crystalize in summer's blaze before the beams of radiation dissolved them to ashes. Oh I know I made the choice and bared my heart while you gave so little left with bits and pieces of broken sea shells a mosaic of love cast rough around the edges deflecting the sun on the sand living in the moment for all these years. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"While the days passed into tears you tasted the salt and let it crystalize in summer's blaze" A heartachingly beautiful write, Lori. You choose your words well. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Bluesy - someone made a huge mistake, and it wasn't you. Just think, it's their loss, not yours. Fine write... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderfully written melancholic tune of your heart, dear Lori. Under the circumstances, we can still remember the beautiful moments, they are not erased by the tears. Better than mourning, which brings unhappiness. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lori, your exquisitely-penned heartache made my own heart cry... You are beautiful from the inside out and should be appreciated and adored for the treasure that you are.    Linda |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Your heart sings - sometimes sadly and sometimes with the depth of your soul and sometimes both. How happy I am to read both this night. You write it beautifully and sing it even more beautifully - with heart. xoxoxo Alison |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"h I know I made the choice and bared my heart while you gave so little left with bits and pieces of broken sea shells a mosaic of love cast rough around the edges deflecting the sun on the sand living in the moment for all these years." this says it all,Lori M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You captured so many moments and then tossed them to the wind they meant so little to you He missed out on so much. This is wonderful, Bluesy One... so exquisite that every line paints his loss... whether he bothers seeing or not. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Beautiful. There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
broken shells .... shame that such makes a beautiful sand and such wretched pains bit nippy here in the Valley these days! : ) CT |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Wow, Lori. The language and visuals here are beautiful. So heartbreaking sad, yet with just enough hope to keep me from totally breaking down. Very good write. Go well. Jim "We are stardust: we are golden: and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden." --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock" |
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