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Sometimes, I feel like...
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HopelessPoet Junior Member
since 2008-12-18
Posts 14 |
Sometimes, I feel like... [LESS] Am I what you wanted? Or am I just the boy Whose heart you've taunted? Or am I just a ghost Through dreams he's haunted? Maybe that's me I see In the picture on the wall? Or is that him, the shadow He casts is always growing tall Now tell me, should I be afraid? Maybe not, just my imagination Maybe just a lapse in my concentration Could it be that I cause my own fear? Or am I just hearing what you want Me to hear? What is this, a common deception? Anything less is a misconception What if it was more than that? Everything else was only a dream Or was it more than what was seen? Sometimes, I feel like... LESS. -- CHRISTOPHER PAUL GALLEGO, October 30th, 2009. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your inner turmoil and self doubt is so evident, and the feelings so real. I'm thinking there are many who can relate. Nice to have you here! Welcome~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, HP! Welcome aboard the pip ship! The saying "Less is often more" came to mind as I read your intriguing inner dialogue of introspection. I believe that we all have them however, however, those who are poets are able to express such thoughts 'on paper', so to speak ~ and you did a fine job of doing so!  Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel ~ a hopeless romantic, a hopeless dreamer, and like yourself ~ a hopeless poet.  |
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HopelessPoet Junior Member
since 2008-12-18
Posts 14 |
Thank you both very much!  I actually didn't like how I formatted this one, I was so very exhausted and didn't really think about how I should structure this piece. Maybe one day I can re-write it and be happy with it. Until then, I consider this a rough draft to an even better poem Cheers! |
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