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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-10-30 07:53 AM




soot man played his old tinback strum
rubbed his finger bones on the slick skins
and nodded his beret to her bosom sway
tapping holy shoes to sin wiggle urgency

she spoke to him from the shimmery trees
soft tongued woman sound with gravy
needing to have the moan words kind
that stirred the ears to be more hungry

I was just a boy man leaning on my distance
she pretened I was some piece of sky
peeking through her bathing room window
when she put her nothing gown on so slowly

she made my tattoos into leatherly lather
slow soap she said to shimmer her belly
said she loved itching up against strangers
like they were her willow tree kindred

and my metal made her hurries go down easy


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AncientHippie
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1 posted 2009-10-30 07:59 AM


DS:  Thank you for this earthy, leather and sweat scented piece of sensual realism.  I love your work.
Cheers

"We are stardust:  we are golden:  and we've got to get ourselves back to the garden."  --Joni Mitchell "Woodstock"

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-10-30 12:38 PM


AH..thanks amigo..it is a fun series to saute
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2009-10-30 12:52 PM


"like they were her willow tree kindred"

I love that line~L

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4 posted 2009-10-30 01:10 PM


"she pretened I was some piece of sky
peeking through her bathing room window
when she put her nothing gown on so slowly"

Oh, do you ever have a way with words! *S* Slow sizzle of sensual... written perfectly! *S*

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-10-30 02:42 PM


ms LG, thank you lady friend.

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ms suthern, thanks for the sizzle smile back ms

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6 posted 2009-10-31 02:23 AM


I remember when I first began to read your poetry .. it was very similar to this style and I was entranced.  I still am.  You write special stuff that suits the fancy to my eyes.

Ali-san

Margherita
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7 posted 2009-10-31 04:49 AM


quote:
tapping holy shoes to sin wiggle urgency


Every line is a hit and the above quoted is truly terrific!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2009-10-31 06:45 AM


ms ali-san, thank you little one..I appreciate your eyes returning often

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ms mar, thank you special lady, for your reads and smiles

playing.with.crayons
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9 posted 2009-10-31 07:34 AM


a way with words indeed!!

I've read this a few times now and there's more to it with every reading. Some simply brilliant lines in there.

sigh...

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