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Her Shoes Stayed Home
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Her Shoes Stayed Home |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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Her Shoes Stayed Home These shoes are the only heart I have left, the only part of her still here – they were her favorites; did she leave them especially for me, or were they missed in her rush to leave? My dream . . . is they were meant for me. Yet the note attached, “blow away, far away” said their staying crosses boundaries I’ve yet to see; invisible lines having nothing to do with my dreams. My dreams that walked out the door when I wasn’t here, all but these shoes, these shoes – the only heart of her – still here. ©wesley james beard, jr. november 8, 2009 |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Jimmy, this aches. This truly aches. It brought back a poignant moment of my own. When my daughter 'flew the coup'. I discovered her slippers left under her bed. At least they were soft and cuddly ~ and cuddle them, I did. You are a fine, expressive writer. Love and a warm hug, Linda   |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"My dream . . . is they were meant for me." It's always better to think positive. Enjoyed~~ M |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Romanticism at its finest ... inspired by a pair of shoes. Great, enjoyable work, dear Jimmy! Love, Margherita  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Hi Jimmy, that is a sad post my friend but it is something to remember her by and sometimes that is all we have left, memories. Good luck Jim and best wishes to you that you will meet someone in the near future who is special. Take care. Lindsay |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Thanks all for the kind words...and Lindsay, I've had the special one for 35 years now... but much appreciate the sentiments.... j. |
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Poetal Member
since 2009-11-09
Posts 74Texas, United States |
True poetry rings from the heart and sad and happy feelings just as you have captured in this fine work. Thanks for the heartwarming read.  AL AL Inmon |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Jimmy, Your poetry just wants me to reach out and hug you. I look for it and smile when I read it - even when it is a bit sad, there is so much beauty in your expression. Love, Alison |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
painfully sweet things left behind |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
No, you certainly are not at a loss for expressive imagery. I have to smile (even though this is threaded with poignancy) because I only own one pair of shoes. Where I go, so do my shoes...unless I am barefoot! However, I always find someone's shoes kicked off in my living room. Shoes say so much about choice--or lack thereof--and footprints leave messages that walk across one's heart sometimes, with or without their owner. Wonder, gently and painfully spoken on the boundaries of "invisible lines" and dreams... KL |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Hey Jimmy, excellent romance lines...such love..been there!! Nice seeing you again. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
jwesley - ouch, this write does say a lot... BC |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
jwesley, intriguing take on how a part of you dies along with the departure of a loved one. thanks for the read |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I read this before - but this time, I cried. A |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Obviously a fantasy...NO woman would leave her shoes behind!  It is a great topic, though, Jim. It could be an earring, a comb, or any small personal item that would be a reminder that she was there and now isn't...great fodder for a poignant poem, which you have done very well. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This tugs pretty hard at my heart strings. Truth is it reads like a scene from a true story, and that's so sad to me. You conveyed so much so well, jwesley! |
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