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RC Langill Member
since 2008-03-09
Posts 104 |
waiting . . . bare twigs sketch themselves into the sky. leaves still bound to branches thin and fade. only death releases them to mount the wind and fly |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very vivid autumn scene! Love, Margherita |
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RC Langill Member
since 2008-03-09
Posts 104 |
Thank you Margherta. Playing this over a bit, I think this change to line 4: waiting . . . bare twigs sketch themselves into the sky. leaves still bound to branches fade and die. only death releases them to mount the wind and fly. connects better to the closing. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I was looking at just that scene out my window here.  Nicely done. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Vivid image! *S* I like this very much! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I agree with the change, RC, it improves the read. BRRRR! It's that time of year again in the northern hemisphere. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
nicely poetic, a very enjoyable moment. yann |
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