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The Color of Love
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The Color of Love |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
She comes to my bed and I slip between her sighs blues blush to rouge and all is seen green with heavy HEAVE-ing we're both... eye to eye |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
whew this is nice  |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
dang! I meant brown, BROWN!!! ;-) |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
hehe too late |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
"Love is a verb; It makes things grow!" Mary Englebreit I always thought if love were a color it would be green. Your poem positively blossoms! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
i like the few words and the entire description of a night commitment, this is sober and powerful, a very well expressed write. THANKS FOR THE POEM; YANN |
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dragngrl28 Junior Member
since 2009-10-12
Posts 45Texas, USA |
like the use of colors and the way the poem is seperated. Personally, I would have preferred something like breathing instead of heave-ing only because of the mind image. I think the poem had just the right amount of erotic so that the poem is sensual and not trashy. |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
thanks drgngrl, actually you're right on point, i have been debating from the start between heaving and breathing. I'm going to send it to a girl, and may go with breathing, haven't decided yet |
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