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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England 
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Lost,lonely,looking for love I met you quietly,hopefully, Your words intriguing,flattering my bruised ego,charming,entrancing me Lucious,lovely,lips,you whispered sweet somethings in my ear I fell deeply in awe of your wild poets heart Laughing,loving,delight in sharing snowy windswept beaches,wild music Mundane domestic chores,made light by your loving,laughing presence. You opened my heavy heart stretching my unquestioning,simple mind Childlike,worshiping at your feet on a pedestal,placing you High above,destined to fall, unwittingly I became your jailor Smothering you with my love your wild darling heart caged Wings beating,against silken bars deluded,drawing you ever closer Pushing you,devouring your freedom fear you'll fly, haunting me My sad,selfish,sorry attempt to stop you flying free Born from familial rejection bottled up,denied,never voiced Simmering,seething,scratching the surface now shrieking to be out You opened up my heart to recognise,accept,forgive,exorcise Pride forgotten,bruised heart beating I ask forgiveness,yet you Refuse to listen,too late your love cold as clay Too hurtful,now my realisation I'd found,my sweet soulmate My confession,now too late trust I will remember you Goodbye my,darling heart,goodbye fly high,like a freebird GR-my way of saying sorry-I understand now.x |
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anniepimm54 Member
since 2009-09-03
Posts 110 |
This is indeed a powerful poem.. excellently writen thank you for sharing your thoughts with us Annie  |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Love is never a captor, only the mind. Hearts are always free. Powerful stuff. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Welcome to PIP, naturegirl. Powerful and thoughtful poem here. Ida |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
After reading your poem I can regconize an all too familiar scene....a reflection I knew of some years past.... Sorry for your loss...sometimes we do realize what we had and it is too late, like the saying, or song "Don't know what you got till its gone" but then, by fate, maybe it was never meant to be...and your true soulmate is just around the corner.? ~ARH |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
Thank you all for your kind comments. They are very welcome & most encouraging.I hope sharing this may have unlocked some hidden potential, but it's very early days yet. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
Thank you Romantic Heart for your kind words. It appears I may have jumped the gun & all is not lost, so hopefully new poems should be a bit lighter in spirit! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Very impressive first post... I look forward to reading more of your work. *S* Welcome to Passions! |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
your wild darling heart caged Wings beating,against silken bars love this! |
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AncientHippie Member
since 2009-10-15
Posts 411Surfing the Cosmic Flow |
Powerful, Naturegirl. This gives us an intimate glimpse into a heart that is growing ever more sensitive and understanding. It is a symphony of compassion. Go well. Jim Sutra 30: Language reflects the Truth of one’s Reality: listen carefully when others speak. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Love requires freedom to expand, to maintain its own altitude. You've written a very tender poignant story, with words of wisdom. May 'freebird' return, to share a love you both can enjoy without restraints. Welcome to Pips. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I can't say it any better than the rest of the gang here so just ditto that for me! ~L |
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