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brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
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nowhere and everywhere

0 posted 2009-09-26 12:30 PM



the Armageddon sky
starless, rages

choked with clouds

she is there, waiting
at hard-knock’s gate

under assumption
and cloaked in shrouds,
she balks

the Calvary late

no knights tonight
to lead her way

out of the mist
missteps stalk

call her out loud
tell her she’s wrong

turning her cheek
and her back,
she walks

averting the vines
on edge of the trestle

she follows the whistle

into apocalypse night

.

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Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
1 posted 2009-09-26 03:34 PM


brneyedgrly - I'm sure that someone as lovely as you that writes like you do a knight is out there waiting...

BC

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
2 posted 2009-09-26 03:45 PM


ss, this is heavy, sad, lonely, tortured, aching, engaging ~ and downright brilliant! What a writer!!!

Shel, you know where there's a shoulder whenever you need one! Sorry, girlfriend, I'm not a valiant knight. ~ Just a little earthy wannabe angel ~ who's falling short.  

Love you,
Lindy xo

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-26-2009 06:38 PM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2009-09-26 05:48 PM


Made me think of someone who is fleeing  ... the scenery is so highly dramatic. You certainly succeeded in conveying powerful emotions with this incredible write.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2009-09-26 07:37 PM


Fine writiing...James
brneyedgrly
Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
5 posted 2009-09-28 12:42 PM



thanks, bc..always appreciate your kind comments

lindy..you never fall short!  thanks for all those descriptors..and welcome to my mind    love you

rita..yes, the apocalypse might cause one to flee, however, she is just pressing on.  Thanks always for your kind words, kind lady..love you too

thanks, james, for reading


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