I Wish I Could Have Been There

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Open Poetry #45

I Wish I Could Have Been There

Gunslinger
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 901
TX, USA

0 posted 2009-09-21 09:33 PM

I Wish I Could Have Been There
Posted by
Gunslinger
I wish I could have been there,
When it finally dawned on you-
This time I really meant it,
When I said that we were through.

The last time was the last time-
You would ever see me cry-
I wish I could have been there-
When you read the line, “Goodbye”!

I wish I could have been there-
When you came through our front door,
To see the scattered pictures-
Lying there upon the floor.

I wish I could have seen your face-
When you walked into the den-
And found my rigging missing
From the nail where it had been.

The same expression on your face-
I saw there long ago-
The day you made me take my pick-
‘Twixt you, or rodeo.

I wish I could have been there-
I think? but then again-
At least against a two ton bull-
I'd have a chance to WIN!

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2009-09-22 02:33 AM

Once long ago, I walked into an abandoned cabin and their were wedding pictures strewn on the floor. You took me back there - it's almost as if you walked out of the same cabin.

That's what your poetry does to me - it tells the story and paints the pictures in my mind.

Alison

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2009-09-22 02:50 PM

This is so unlike your usual musings, and it dug down and hurt deep. I think we have all been there at one time or another. We move on, and somehow it all make sense eventually. Well done!

brneyedgrly
Senior Member

since 2009-06-08

Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere

3 posted 2009-09-22 05:38 PM

this reminded me of garth brooks song

I guess that is what happens with cowboys..

larzana
Member

since 2009-09-17

Posts 55

4 posted 2009-09-22 07:21 PM

That was like wow. Ouch. I agree, I think we've all been there.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2009-09-22 07:42 PM

Good to read your words, Gunslinger.
LOL, enjoyed the ending. To see another POV, it must be hard for the one who stays at home. For her, maybe it was a bit too much 'bull' to grapple?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2009-09-22 07:48 PM

Nice writing...brings back a few memories...James

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