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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2009-09-18 06:17 PM


Words

I heard them
and regret
every stupid thing I've said
and even more than that--
the acts--
I wrote them down so they would last
and who can know which stone that's cast
will be the one that kills?

I'll take them all and wad them up,
weaving broken twigs in pyre
a tower of my Babble-On
should make a fire grandiose!
So bring to me my tambourine
and take from me my clothes.
Watch as nearly fifty years
strikes up the match in wretched pose:

vellum on the bones of me
a map unnecessarily
white against the night of "don't"--
the second harvest of the crone
a blaze of all I can't atone--

my words

caricature.

* * *

You should come. We'll have a feast.
Suggestion? Yes, R.S.V.P.
but cut the throat of your own goat--
the fire is community,
as ashes take to winds which blow
to mock our fig leaf coverings
of rationale all justified
as reasoning (or just plain lies)
a spectacle of nudity
there, too bare beneath the skies.

* * *

wishes

* * *

I wish I'd never owned a pen.
I wish I were an artisan
of language, as to be a scribe.

* * *

words...

* * *

I heard them, staged them--
"curse!"
Audaciously, I called them,
"verse".
I raged them all.
I called it "work"--
stabbing at my veins with quill
my grievances in blood, I spill

the ink of me again

all of these "poignant" petty pleas
to satiate my selves, to please

a mood

a frantic

desperate bid

to appease the skin I'm in--
the very mustard seed of sin.
Every wrong I've ever done
was in service to The One:

the deity

of

Me.

* * *


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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2009-09-18 06:55 PM


Well, that deity of YOU has got a wonderful, creative, sharp mind, dear Karen. What a read, write, work, POEM!

Such powerful analysis written in appealing musical form!

You strip yourself with incredible skill.

Love,
Margherita

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Gaia
2 posted 2009-09-18 07:37 PM


Hey you, that tower of Babble-On line
is briliant!
Don't get too close to that 'blaze' m'dear.

I am still packing...yes...got delayed a bit. Can you add my lifetime of junk to that bonfire?
Maybe time for s'mores?

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2009-09-18 08:26 PM


Funny you should mention that, kace. We're going to TRY to have a metaphorical bonfire.

Things we don't need--begone!

And I'm the suburbs, so a bonfire is out of the question. (The neighbors call the cops if I wear my panties sideways. And I guess, I must concede, at my age, if someone KNOWS I'm wearing my pants sideways--nod--I oughtta be arrested!)

But consider this'n..internal housekeeping?

I love you both, so very much.


Marchmadness
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4 posted 2009-09-18 11:19 PM


Love the tower of Babble-on too. Just love following your pen through your intriging thoughts.
                              Ida
              

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2009-09-19 12:56 PM


Enjoyed...James
martiniat8
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6 posted 2009-09-19 01:15 AM


powerful! with a little tweak it would make a good rap
XOx Uriah xOX
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7 posted 2009-09-19 11:53 AM


::smiles::
Artic Wind
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8 posted 2009-09-19 01:01 PM



to appease the skin I'm in--
the very mustard seed of sin.
Every wrong I've ever done
was in service to The One:

the deity

of

Me.

* * *............................................................."

This is my favorite part of this poem. Your endings always have the perfect touch to send off a great poem.


ARCTIC WIND

OwlSA
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9 posted 2009-09-21 02:11 PM


Thank goodness you did all those things, Karen, because if you hadn't, you wouldn't be you - and where would we all be then?  Much poorer.  

Please tell me how one wears one's pants sideways!  My legs and my mind are getting all tangled up in the mere contemplation thereof.  I am absolutely fascinated to know how this is done.  This goes way beyond my putting my big toe in my ear!

Owl

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10 posted 2009-09-21 02:35 PM


Hell I quite dieting completely..(grin) enjoyed you K
serenity blaze
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11 posted 2009-09-21 04:48 PM


How does one wear one's panties sideways?

French cut...glum nod.

Thanks all for reading, and DS has me craving a smoothie. (I just love the wedding cake flavor...)

and I'm cracking up, because it's taking me a long time to thank you all because the phone keeps ringing, and that one was my friend, Paula--so I asked her about the panties sideway thing, and she said IMMEDIATELY, "Yep. French cut."

*shaking my head*

And I thought that only happened to fat chicks. Lawsy, I have issues!


OwlSA
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12 posted 2009-09-22 01:15 PM


I am still confuzzled about how one wears one's panties sideways - also not sure what a French cut is - I would guess high sides, but don't underconstubulate how that would help.  I must be thick.  Giggles.  

Owl

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13 posted 2009-09-22 02:34 PM


a tower of my Babble-On
should make a fire grandiose!

Lord, if everyone only knew how funny you really are K.  


Wonder why I am ALWAYS comment #13?  It is starting to totally freak me out!

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