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martiniat8
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since 2003-06-21
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Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2009-09-17 03:51 AM


I'm a little bit giddy
a little bit buzzed

and a man out of rhyme...

they say
good things come to wait
and I'm a miracle man
a man of signs

a man that sees, hears
and reasons
in accordance to
signs, the divine

this week
so high
so low
so meek

my intuition saying
we'd be fine

no need to worry
this obsessive
compulsive
mind

I held my tongue
played every hand I had
until she broke the silence
saying with me
she could never ever
be mad

I didn't have to worry
my frets were all for not
when she finally came from undercover
to a heart that is caught

but wait
catching myself

to hesitate
just a bit

while not on cloud nine
I'd say it's an eight

until we speak tomorrow
I'll have to wait

she loved my message
and laughed out loud
while behind the curtain
she's been working
preparing the plow

I didn't need to call
I just needed to wait
while she prepared herself
for the sake of the gate

and one final message,
she uttered no clue
"we need to talk"
what would that mean
if uttered to you

the context was apologetic
for leaving me in the dark
no need to be worried
while I sang like a lark

saying our goodnights
sweet dreams
sleep well
momentarily, we part

with her calling me,
Romeo
and I,
Sweetheart


(I'm sorry this poem is so poorly written, and one day I will read it and roll my eyes, but right now, I feel as infantile as with the style in which it was written)
goodnight, all
~Brad

© Copyright 2009 Kenneth Bradley Smith - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
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1 posted 2009-09-17 04:06 AM


It seems you have been comforted and the joy unfolds lovingly on the page. I think so many will be able to relate! "We need to talk" is a good start. Just to be left in "the dark" is unbearable.

I enjoyed this much, the emotion is well rendered.

Love,
Margherita

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