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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico 
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(My Tribute to the souls that perished, 9/11) My Yuletide poem, written early that year Coming in from old Sanibel Beach Brushing sea shells from my hair I was inspired by island surf tangling them into place Yes, I wrote about selfless giving, candy laced lulled by island breezes whispering "life is good." My rhyme Born by sweet summer-glow coconuts dashed Laid bare in their milky wine Written too early Undone by passion, yearning for my soul to fly, as I ran up the shore No care in the world, nothing save foot prints of Blue Heron, Egret along side my own Did I write too early? A September morning, just 'round the bend Unknown to all killing the after-glow from my tropical lair The castles fell My watch, shattered by photos of smokey horror Wheelchairs, heroes amidst on that island, not my island, our island A man carried a women, drowning in her own blood "He saved my life!" My Yuletide poem, written early I on my piece of sand, had not yet witnessed True compassion, the charity of humanity challenged Delicate foot prints of those souls forever, Memorialized Not on a sandy beach, captured in the wind with their dreams placed perfectly within all of our hearts. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If I were to quote all the lines that I appreciated in your poem, I would have to quote the entire poem. Each one of the 9/11 poems I have read are special in their own way ~ as is yours, Jan. The stark contrast between the sandy beach and the smoking hell of the tumbling towers is poetically effective. The horror and tradgedy of it all still brings tears to us all. These are a few of my favourite lines ~ "The castles fell My watch, shattered by photos of smokey horror Wheelchairs, heroes amidst on that island, not my island, our island" "Delicate foot prints of those souls forever, Memorialized Not on a sandy beach, captured in the wind with their dreams placed perfectly within all of our hearts." The healing continues...   Linda |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Janet, this really took me in powerfully. The shock of such events hits even more when it hits like a lightning in the blue skies. You described this with incredible mastery. Hauntingly intense! Love, Margherita |
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Heart2Heart Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738Scotland/Norway |
After having read many heartfelt poems on the horrific tragedy of 9/11, it strikes (same as Linda mentions), that they are unique but so different. A lovely lament and tribute. Katriona |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
a very moving and beautiful tribute Janet.. expressed so very well. May peace be with those perished. Bisous du Paris RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
Thanks, guys Well, it really did happen for me that way. I had gone down to Sanibel Island for a few weeks and had already started writing a Christmas poem for my Christmas Cards....so oblivious that anything that horrendous could happen before Yuletide actually arrived. And then when it did happen, my Christmas poem was just a piece of fluff. "Not on my island, but our island" No cards that year! Jan |
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