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of geason crossing |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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I imagined we were a stationary train then a boxcar of two that was nearly over crowded so we had to get closer into each other like putting on another lover's gloving you said you liked my fingers like limbs that you could climb the tree feeling of and you knew I couldn't look into your eyes without that reaction that scared you sometimes we exchanged our small talk and whispering like mouthfulls of water and then running to that widefire place we started on purpose pretending to put it out when it was raging then there was that residue scattered after like spring flowers that some other god planted and everywhere your white dress went waltzing you picked up colors you said would be pretty when you mingled them in the beard of my mind ___________ daark (do of sand) |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, my god!! Each line sounds like an irresistible song that makes me want to dance, even if only in the heart. Or I could do some somersaults to express the joy you convey with this gem ... maybe better not! Last time I tried to demonstrate my skills in the Cossacks' dance I ended up moaning ... in pain!  Consideration: isn't it time to get published yet?!! Love, Margherita   |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i agree your poetry is like water in motion |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend...don't posting here count as publishing? grin.. _____________ ms slick..thank you ms Helen, you bless me. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Absolutely correct! ~ Your poetry flows with poetic rhythm that makes a perfect poem.  ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
AW...thanks so much my friend |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Yes, dear D., it does count and this is a beautiful place to share our poems. But - though I am sure many more people read you besides those who actually leave a comment - out there in the world there would be multitudes who would appreciate it too. Why deprive them of this possibility? One of the traits of your personality that always impresses me too, is your humbleness. The kind of humbleness that is characteristic for the truly great souls. Love, M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar...you are a lovely friend, you bless me with your reads and comments. I guess I could publish one copy just for you. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
 That would be too much honor, but thank you for the thought, dear D.!  ... you know there is a long list of fans waiting!Well, while you are in such a nice mood, why don't you begin by putting together a selection of your most acclaimed gems? You could let us - the fans - indicate our personal favorites! Oh, isn't that a good idea?  M |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
she traveled in grace his word winds lifting her up sky and mind now one. Indigo |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar...does that mean I need to think? oh my... ___________ ms indi...thinking of you makes me smile thanks lady |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
If you are not published, you need to be! This poem is just magnificent, like everything that you write. Jan |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms jb. Thank you so much lady. I do leave some on bar napkins from time to time. |
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