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Silence of the Stars
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Silence of the Stars |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana 
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You come and go as you traverse the sky Oceans apart still we never shall fall United beyond what passes these eyes For no Earthly sum would we miss it all From beginnings until ending’s sad sound We never asked for anything like this Just to keep heads in air and feet on ground But we betrayed ourselves with a first kiss Someday became one day then just never As the noise grew louder, hands to my ears The pain grew greater as I remembered That the loudest sound was us with you here Your beauty has been compared to the stars, Your absence is the silence that they are |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Just beautiful, the last two lines especially took a good grip on my heart |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
sigh.....such a heavenly creature that roams your poems....  ~~**~~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You have such a beautiful poetic spirit. This holds quivering emotions. Love, Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Perfect ending, Jer! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Chalmette Guy - the poem is great, but the last two lines are amazing... BC |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
From beginnings until ending’s sad sound We never asked for anything like this Just to keep heads in air and feet on ground But we betrayed ourselves with a first kiss ~&~ All of the poem is remarkable, as only you can bring justice to such; remarkable the feel and presence, as if it were a first touch.  Well done, m'friend. Very well done. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Gorgeous |
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peaceseaker Member
since 2009-07-29
Posts 161 |
Hi....Some great emotions and thoughts in this...well done...I loved the last 2 lines... "Your beauty has been compared to the stars, Your absence is the silence that they are" peaceseaker |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
yeah the last 2 lines are truly stellar |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
Tis' better to have loved and lost then to have never loved at all. Beautifully written. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
beautiful  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This is so moving and full of feelings. Love this beauty, one of your very best, guy~~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Your poems have this perfect poetic touch. Just wonderful to read, even more than twice! ARCTIC WIND |
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