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As I used to be
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As I used to be |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813
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And if on canvas were I chanced to be, under the artist’s gaze, I’d surely surmise to lift my chin and paste on an elegant smile but as the brush is raised I would silently will it the capability of erasing the lines etched deep by grief and softening the eyes that never get quite enough sleep. I would urge it sight, to see beyond what is the now of me and instead, paint me as I used to be. Back past the years of foolishness when recklessness almost threw my hardened heart away and the years before that, when I gave up who I was for a perfidious promise of peace. And since we have come thus far this brush and I, lets skim on by the tremulous teens when going braless and barefoot gave breath to freedom and the world still held promises to claim and settle in to those lighthearted days when pigtails, twinkling eyes and daddy’s knee-high red cowboy boots were endearing instead of foolish, and laughter… laughter echoed as life’s nectar was eagerly gathered with the busy buzzing of a bee. Paint of happier times oh please, let’s forget this day this month and of what year it is dab into the brighter colors of yesteryear and paint me as I used to be. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
luminosity - it would be great to go back. Nice write... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very captivating, but believe me you have never been more beautiful than right now ... the painter would know and render your soul beautifully. Enjoyed your well written work. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
go backs are the the rewinds of those special movie kind of dreams that keep us looking through the windows of tomorrow...I enjoyed your view of the concept |
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Toccatta Junior Member
since 2009-07-08
Posts 26 |
I really like this, especially the last four lines! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Luminous One, I have missed your poetry. I understood this, so well. There have been times when I have felt this way, as well. Thankfully, that is not the place where I am now. You wrote this very well. You are a very fine writer ~ one with depth. I can sense your mature beauty through the richness and depth of your writing. Kiss the mirror for me.  I find it curious that I have come to terms with the aging process and even though I'm older, heavier, and with some wrinkles thrown in for good measure, I feel more confident and attractive now than when I was supposedly at my prime! I can still get nostalgic at times and reminisce about the early years and the younger me ~ but they pass. Sorry for going on and on here. It's just that I really felt your poem and what you had to say. It is so good to see you posting again, Beautiful One. Giving you a loving, understanding hug, EA  |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
thank you all....I have so limited internet access I will not try for a lengthy reply, but do know that I really enjoy actually being online and sharing thoughts with you all......thank you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Whatever moment in time the painter might commemorate, if he could somehow show your incredible heart and indestructable spirit, people would stop and stare in awe at the beauty. Hugs to you, dear O&O... my now is better because of you. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
thank you lady, as mine is better because of you ...*enthusiastic head nod* |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
love this  |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
What a pleasurable read! God bless, Rae |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think it would be wonderful to be young and have todays wisdom but it seems we have to go through a proccess to get to wisdom and by the time we get there youth has flown. Love your take on this. Ida |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
luminosity, May those days live on inside you. They bring the light to the eye and the little grin to the lips. I think we all carry that pixie of who we once were - may we always and forever let her out to play! Wonderful writing. I simply love this poem. Alison |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
powerfully effective and emotive 'write' ! "dab into the brighter colors of yesteryear and paint me as I used to be." ... yes, the ultimate song of the 'everyman'! much applause for this 'penning' !! |
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ESHA SEN GUPTA Member
since 2009-09-01
Posts 108Maharashtra,India |
I corelated instantly with your poem as I am going through a similiar phase of ifs and but,you brought forward many a persons feelings in a very unique way. Love Esha |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
I am so touched by each and every unique reply, it is a good sign, I think, perhaps the poetry writing phase of my life has not yet died as I thought |
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