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Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

0 posted 2009-08-18 11:10 AM

Drizzle

My mood is grey
Heavy as a widow’s smile.
I walk a staggered line
With pockets full pain.
Church bells ring
For someone
Faint and haunting

I sit hard
On a bench for losers
Pigeons don’t even bother
To ask me for a thing.

I lean forward
Put my head in my hands
With a suppressed scream
I rub at love's teeth marks.
When will it stop
Being my enemy

With a sigh I look up
No clouds floating by
No sun to warm me
Just the drizzle of
Another lonely day.

Never do injustice to a man who isn't afraid to die because of it. - Yoin

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2009-08-18 01:12 PM

A haunting poem, Yoinn. Written with your usual mastery but sad.
Ida

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2009-08-18 02:42 PM

this haunts
in a good echoing way

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

3 posted 2009-08-18 02:56 PM

great write, kinda reminds me of Dwight Yoakam's song, Inside the pocket of a clown

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

4 posted 2009-08-19 01:55 AM

Awe...here is a

well, I hear you and see you....
and hope your day is a sunny one tomorrow!

~ARH

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2009-08-19 03:05 AM

creepy, Yoinn, but very convincing and beautifully written...Ouah .

yann

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

6 posted 2009-08-19 09:47 PM

Yeah I kinda ebb and flow with my writing. Been on the sad, painful swing for the last few days now. thanks for your reply Ida.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

7 posted 2009-08-19 09:48 PM

Thank you Inke Glad you liked it.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

8 posted 2009-08-19 09:49 PM

I don't think I have heard that one Brad. I will have to check it out. Thanks for the reply.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

9 posted 2009-08-19 09:50 PM

Thanks ARH. That little hug from you sure will help.

Yoin

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

10 posted 2009-08-19 09:52 PM

thanks Yann. As always I appreciate you words.

Yoin

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

11 posted 2009-08-22 02:08 AM

Yep, you have been on a sad poem roll, but you write them very well. Hope life is not this bleak for you though.

A

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

12 posted 2009-08-22 11:05 AM

Allison,
Lol yeah the roll had been about 30 years now. No I am really not at all depressed. It just seams to be what I want to write about is all. So I just go with it.

thanks Allison.

Yoin

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