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Sunday Solitude (Ottava Rima from the PW)
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Sunday Solitude (Ottava Rima from the PW) |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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For my Mom ~ who raised five children, knit our mittens, baked our bread, told us stories about Jack Frost and taught us that Sundays are quiet days. Sunday Solitude Another Sunday-sit-down cup of tea The kids play games; the bread loaves slowly bake The smell of ginger tea and yeast is freed She thinks about the patterns still to make; A strand of purple yarn falls off her knees. As windy air sends autumn to the lake The days, now short, become much longer nights It’s time for mittens, scarves and woolen tights. The birch leaves turn a muted gold with grace And skies now frame the world in vivid blue While icy, fall air longs to chill her face It frosts the breath, to reach from hat to shoes The window panes are tatted with fine lace Designs on frosted glass, etched art to view Another Sunday-sit-down-sipping day She drinks the warmth to keep the cold at bay - Alison Thank you, Balladeer |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, I am giving you a standing ovation ~ and 2 thumbs up ~ and a high five!!! Wow, did you ever come up with a beauty of an Otava Rima!!! Well done!!!! I'm saving this as a fine example of this poetic form!!!  ~ Not only for the technically perfect form, but for the 'hearth'-warming qualities of it! It was a pleasure to read and to have a glimpse into your life. Your beautiful Mom created a beautiful daughter.  Love you, Lasky Girl! Linder Lou  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, This is a very nice tribute to your mother. Love Bobby |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Wow! This is a wonderful tribute to your mom, Alison. I am sure your mom will treasure this beautiful poem always and forever. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I love this, so comforting, Alison and I remember those cold days and long nights very well. An Occtava Rima, hmmm. Never heard of it but I wouldn't mind giving it a try. Ida |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
Wow, amazing, maybe someday, in the WAY WAY future I'll have able to write half as well as you. Keep up the amazingness, Rileigh |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Sundays used to be that way here too. Too much clatter these days on Sundays. You brought back those sweet times here |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Linder Lou, Thank you. I am so happy that you are in the PW now too. It's so much more fun with more people. Plus, Doc was kicking my butt! Thank you for liking this one. It just came .. my Mom is pretty special and I think I need to tell her that more. Love, Alison - James, Thank you so much! Alison - Bobby, Thank you. She's quite a lady! Love, Alison - Thank you, sweet Sue. Love you. Alison - Ida, thank you. Come play in the Poetry Workshop with us. It's lots of fun! XoXoXo Alison - Rileigh, I struggled so much with meter when I started the Workshop. I still do sometimes. I have cried buckets. You are doing great! Keep up the writing. xoxox Alison - inky girl, I just make time. Bought a red teapot to take upstairs when I read. It relaxes me and makes me think of my Mom's house. Give it a shot sometime. xoxoxo Alison |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (does happy dance) Oh my gosh, you did an amazing job covering this poetic structure while also offering your beloved mother the most complete, fitting tribute...........this resonates with such warmth and Norman Rockwell-esque beauty and simplicity that anyone can easily relate to and reflect on their own mother's incandescent love! (huggies) This is a timeless treasure, my friend, truly one of my absolute favorites of yours to date! XOXO, Lisping Hibiscus "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Noah, You have thrilled me with your loving response. My mother is one of my very best friends - I am truly blessed to have her in my life. Thank you so much for enjoying this poem for her. xoxoxo Alison |
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