Open Poetry #45 |
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The Welcoming Rain (re-edit) |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
"The Welcoming Rain" Bathing in the pool keeping the head just, above the surface feel the hot and cool wind caress your face in a fine, sweet convection smell the coming storm in the rumble of the thunder rolling over the rippled tide invisible raindrops plop a timid splash like pen drops in an ink colored flash you'll find these waters warm and receptive never jealous, or possessive always patient and palpable pausing to profess their purpose reflective of all that's above cleansing of all that lies below washing away the daily debris and the gathered dust from the past flooding it away fast fresh and free find renewal, reawakened for a new beginning in the welcoming rain... [This message has been edited by martiniat8 (08-06-2009 12:33 AM).] |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
hey I like this brad. washing away the daily debris and the gathered dust from the past flooding it fast away and free my fav lines. Yoin |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Thanks, Yoin. I think it need a little re-edit. Ill have another go at it later. I think my favorite stanza is the invisible raindrops make a timid splash like pen drops in an ink colored splash |
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