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Open Poetry #45

Gathering Waters

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2009-07-31 02:48 AM

She sits alone, by the sea
as if all the waters of the world
had been gathered together
just to craft her eyes...

I would swim to her, if I could
If I knew she would be there, waiting for me
but I am here, trapped
in this landlocked heart

the choice between two men
so different
so defined

I am
refined
reticent
and ready

for her return...

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

1 posted 2009-07-31 05:56 AM

If I were you, I'd make this a one stanza poem.

The first stanza blew me away.

I love my dog, and my truck. It's that simple, really.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2009-07-31 09:56 AM

I truly just read your poem 3 times. It was mesmerizing. I was pulled right into the whole scenario. May your butterfly return. Personally, I would find a refined man who is ready for love and who is able to express that love so poetically, ~ to be irresistible and well-worth the return flight!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2009-07-31 10:13 AM

Very nice martini man, enjoyed the morning swim and
the lap of love surrounding your landlocked heart.

Beautiful poem~

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

4 posted 2009-07-31 09:19 PM

Enjoyed reading your wonderful poem.

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