Open Poetry #45 |
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Who Really Cares |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan ![]() |
Who really cares Who really cares about beauty. It coats the bottom of my boots at least once a week. I read the papers and see that it gets punched in the face everyday. Who really cares about love, all sharp edged and jagged It cuts you even if you do. It always stays at my neighbors house, never showing up at my door with a pie. Who really cares about the passage of time. My hands continue to ache, the clock speaks its calloused song, as my tears seep through the floor and pool in the basement. |
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Kaoru![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
It's hard to respond to this because I've pondered the same question and came to no conclusion only I haven't put it so eloquently as you. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
..."Who really cares about the passage of time. My hands continue to ache, the clock speaks its calloused song, as my tears seep through the floor and pool in the basement." Excellent imagery Tim. Left a lump in my throat. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
you know this blows me away I want more... love you, berney my mind won't rest and I don't sleep... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Powerful poetic imagery, dear Yoinn. Now, make that pie and bring it to your neighbour ... it works like this. ![]() Sending you some sunshine to dry out the basement ![]() Love, M |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Perhaps Margherita is right, Yoinn, (she is very wise) I think caring does attract caring. Do you know how to bake a pie? You sure know how to write a poem. Ida |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Yoinn - I don't really know what to say, as I've been in that place, and didn't know the words when I was there... BC |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Kaoru, Thanks for your reply, I have read some of your stuff and found the passion you write with quite eloquent. Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
TD, LOL sorry about the lump, I will stir it a bit more next time. thanks for the reply tho ! Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Thanks Berney, Im pretty sure I won't be running out of sad poetry anytime soon (lol) so you will get more. Thanks for the praise Yoin |
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Yoinn Senior Member
since 2007-08-16
Posts 649Michigan |
Margherita, Ida and Bill thank you all for your replies. You all have a good heart and I am lucky to have friends here that show concern. But please don't worry about ole Yoin. It really is just the way that I write. Im doing fine ![]() Big sweaty man hugs for ya Yeaah even you Bill...lol Yoin |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Very powerful imagery. |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
It's interesting to consider who really cares. I love the way you wrote this - beauty on the bottom of your boot. Who will show up at your door with a pie? I think I got those right - if not, those are the thoughts I carry away. The lovely is so often overlooked for the sensational. Maybe people are not told to care - they are only told how to think. You get me thinking about the most interesting things. Alison |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
I care |
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