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glance dance sooth |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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our mornings would often just swallow into day like the leftover part was still on the lips some fog kind of overcast lipstick lingering and I would roll sumatra around in my cup like a child turning over sand to look under and see if there were secrets no one knew about on occasion you would be taller than me walking but you let your eyes be the same kind of friendly when you spilled your favorite hello on my shirt then looked away before my eyes found your charms not that they were really lost or even hidden but more, you didn't want to know me wanting and if we never met, would our glancing be eye to eye _____________ daark |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"when you spilled your favorite hello on my shirt" You use such powerful metaphors but you do it so nonchalantly that I am forced to be calm. I enjoy your spills. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Love all of this, to begin with the title, and especially quote: Secrets and mysteries keep us wondering and vigil and alive ...  Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms K..thanks so very much lady friend. ____________ ms mar, thank you for liking secrets ms and for reading my quill spills |
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jbstillwater Member
since 2009-07-03
Posts 216Albuquerque, New Mexico |
LIked this one very much, felt like I was walking along with you on this one. I love your play on nouns and verbs. Very different. Huggs Jan |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D, It's time for my goodnight story/poem and I'll just drift on this one tonight. You make me smile with your magical way of writing. Oh and thank you. A little sanity is always appreciated. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms jb, thanks ms ______________ ms ali-san, thank you little one |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and I would roll sumatra around in my cup Copying the best poetic lines would be impossible... so I just copied the one that makes me want a cup of java... and more. *S* Love this! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suthern thanks so much lady |
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pretty1 Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 22 |
Oh Dark Stranger - This one made me feel as though I was walking by and stolen glances were stolen between two lovers. Thanks for sharing - you have an incredible way with words! Pretty1 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms pretty..you do make me smile,,feels like a story sometimes thank you |
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