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secret date |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
tick tock goes the clock on my stand an hour to get ready so excited is this really happening finally a chance to go out see a movie does this shirt look ok how about these jeans oh what a day working and waitig for the time to arrive popcorn with extra butter sounds nice milk duds too you like them just like i do 30 minutes left butterflies in my chest a tornado in my stomach make sure my hair looks good perfect no so much a little bit of make up just enough 17 minutes and counting the time grows near my legs are weak and im driving oh dear finally i can warm up the car i grab my coat 7 minutes now the radio playing our song as i back out this out fit is cute no doubt i pull up to ur drive way you walk to the car the song is just ending as you get in we are on our way to our .... |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
i like it! the rhyme scheme is a bit confusing, but i really like the topic and how everyone can relate to it <3 |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
thank you very much i appriciate the comments |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
I didn't realize there was a rhyming scheme here. Oops. Hehe. But I really liked the topic. Very sweet and innocent. -zach |
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m48 Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108 |
thank you for ur feed back and i like to write what i feel even if it dosent quite fit lol. |
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