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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-12-18 10:10 PM

this poem kinda just busted out of my brain. pardon me if it doesn't make much sense.

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oh tiny heart tell me where you've been
Shake off the dust you greedily hold
Tell me all you smelled and seen
while removing your tear cased mold

Whats that behind you tiny heart?
Is that a button and some twine?
Tell me when you fell apart
For I feel you once were mine

When was it again dear heart
That you were sewn to my very sleeve
Remind me again when you depart
For I might not be here when you leave

Go off on your way now
For I've stitched all your wounds
You've managed to hold yourself somehow
But I know I'll see you next time around

oh tiny heart go on without me
I'm just a burden at your side
Its better if I not be
there when you decide

To leave my wool sleeve..

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2009-12-19 07:17 PM

wow pretty good

i like the idea of talking to your broken heart. very creative

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

2 posted 2009-12-19 07:45 PM

i loved this!

"Whats that behind you tiny heart?
Is that a button and some twine?
Tell me when you fell apart
For I feel you once were mine"

that was my favourite part

great write
-Lee

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2009-12-20 08:59 PM

thank you!
yea that was my favorite line too.

m48
Member

since 2009-12-02

Posts 108

4 posted 2009-12-22 10:25 AM

what a delightful little poem. really made me think. i like it.

Jaki H
Member

since 2008-01-19

Posts 232
NJ, USA

5 posted 2009-12-28 11:37 AM

awww i love it! this is exactly the type of poem i like best, and the rhyme scheme was great!

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

6 posted 2010-01-10 11:59 PM

I like this one! It's nice!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

MadMarcus
Junior Member

since 2009-11-25

Posts 25
Sweden, Solna

7 posted 2010-01-11 04:04 PM

A very nice poem. I love it ^^

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

8 posted 2010-01-23 12:40 PM

Thank you

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