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HersheyKiss
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since 2008-06-02
Posts 137
New Jersey

0 posted 2009-11-29 05:16 PM


Theres just so much on my mind right now I can't even explain. Please let me know what you think of this piece.

YOUR LIFE OUR WOES:

Your words seem slurred and jumbled
As if you're not making any sense
Eyes red like you're lacking sleep
And you always seem to be tense

Too bad you can't see yourself
When you're in such a state
Couldn't you ever come home sober?
For that day I'll have to wait

Shattered dreams and a broken home
It's all you've ever given us
The good memories we've shared with you
Are replaced with the not so wondrous

A father you've never been to us
A husband my mother once knew
You've spent more time in bars than home
With us it's less than a few

What happened to our lives together
Why did you throw it all away?
We'd be there if only you'd say the word
But liquor can't comfort you till you're gray.

All our savings, every single dime
You've squandered away with ease
Spent on alcohol throughout the years
You couldn't stop even when we begged please

There were also the times of violence
When you would throw things around
Cursing us for no apparent reason
As if you picked us up from the dog pound

What did we do to deserve this treatment?
Our whole lives are filled with dread
If only you could feel what we did
You'd understand the words I've said

But now I've grown up, it's far too late
The damage is already done
I'll never regain lost childhood days
And who knows what my brother will become

I've learned from you in a different way
Alcohol is my sworn enemy
Sorry to say I don't want to be like you
To me the most important thing is family.

© Copyright 2009 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
1 posted 2009-11-29 07:36 PM


This is a great great poem Dani.. and i know the feeling..

You'll get by hunni.. your one of the strongest people i know!!

Love and Hugs,
Jess

HersheyKiss
Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137
New Jersey
2 posted 2009-11-29 08:00 PM


I used to be strong not so much anymore...

Anywho Jess!!! How are you?? How is everything? Please update me on how Amelia is doing.

Leanne <3
Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia
3 posted 2009-11-29 09:12 PM


From what I’ve gathered from this poem, you’ve chosen a different path from your father, and stuck by your beliefs even through the hardest of times, that shows incredible strength!

Enjoyed this one a lot, take care
-Lee

precious pearls
Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110
NJ; United States
4 posted 2009-12-12 07:55 PM


OMG danielle it was so beautiful... made me wanna cry for you... but out of sorrow and out of pride. I'm so proud you've made it through dani and i kno you'll continue to meet your goals...
-Kai

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