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rebelangelv
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0 posted 2009-11-13 07:34 PM



leave already
just get out
just go die
i'm better without
you once wanted my dead
now this is my creed:
you must die now
cause you're killing me
i regret the time i save you
the 1st, 2nd and last
it wasn't worth the fight
i wish i could change the past
seriously, i hope it's slow
i hope it hurts you too
then you'll be gone forever
so i don't ever have to see you
yes i'm full of malice
it's true, i don't care
but you're filling me with rage
just because you're sitting there
so just go kill yourself
not like you haven't tried before
sorry that i stopped it
go do it just once more
it's just not enough
that you're dying on the inside
i want you torn apart
and lying in the grave
so leave already witch
just go on and go die
please just do die
cause i'm seriously better without

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

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1 posted 2009-11-14 01:29 PM


This is a seriously intense rant I must say.  I always have to hope that people with these kind of anger issues find a way to turn it around, and communicate to be heard a little better.

        
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rebelangelv
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2 posted 2009-11-14 01:49 PM


hahaha yea...lol but i wasn't angry when i wrote this. lol i've had writer's block so i've been messing around trying to write in other POVs and whatnot..and this came out haha
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3 posted 2009-11-14 02:05 PM


You succeeded in doing an other's POV well.
rebelangelv
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4 posted 2009-11-14 04:28 PM


thank you

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

precious pearls
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5 posted 2009-11-14 09:46 PM


so deep...so powerful...so much anger...loved it, can totally relate

-Kai

rebelangelv
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6 posted 2009-11-14 10:17 PM


thanks kai!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

Rosie_Orange
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7 posted 2009-11-15 01:31 PM


its quite incredible! from the first line, i wanted to read the whole poem, and it really hits emotions!
rebelangelv
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8 posted 2009-11-15 07:01 PM


thank you! it means a lot. it's the first i've written in months

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

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