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Ravagence
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since 2009-08-16
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0 posted 2009-11-03 07:43 PM


Note: I decided to write a "poetic story" with a unique rhythm, that's why it's so weird looking.

I quietly peek out the window,
   and in my haste
knocking my head on the sill.

My choke back a yelp,
   my vision starts to fade
a creeping shadow engulfing my retinas

It's snowing; sparks of yellow and white,
   a sudden wave of queasiness flows over me
and chills fill my body to the brim.

I black out; feeling the grooves on the floor for guidance,
   I feel my heart rate suddenly drop
and I fall on my back.

I listen to the heart slowly pumping in my ears,
   it's going slower as I wait
and I'm afraid it might stop.

I  move   my    hand     to      my        heart         ,
          I           can           feel          it           faltering

I cry to God to make it stop,
   all the times I was bad
I cry for you to forgive.

I          can         feel        the       weight      give     ,
          I see my mom crying and my Dad talking to other men
I'm     sorry       that   I was   such        a   bad  child.

I give in to it; all the pressure,
   it falls on me like a tsunami
crashing.

I'mSorryDadThatIWasSoBad
   IPromiseNeverToDoItAgain
ToNeverDisobeyYouAgain.

My parents look down at me,
   the doctors with surprise
My dad kneels beside me.

-It's okay Son, I forgive you; don't stop living-

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