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Singsong Defeat
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Singsong Defeat |
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Ravagence Member
since 2009-08-16
Posts 79 |
Coated in confusion, Your words don't flow Cut apart by your ignorance; and scrambled by your innocence. Left powerless and weak by your insensibility You cannot see through the glass when your face is too close, and it fogs. Your notions are tired, you might as well give it a rest; Since you cannot win this battle drowsily, then you might end up in defeat. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I really like this, it's awesome. I think you should take out the last line, though; you really don't need it. The hardest part about writing poetry, |
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