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Ravagence
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since 2009-08-16
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0 posted 2009-09-18 06:59 PM


You can wear all the make up in the world,
I wouldn't care.
You can do your hair just for me,
and It won't matter.
You can wear expensive clothes;
It doesn't matter.

It's who you are,
not
what.
You could be a hermit,
and I'd love you.

Love you for who you are.
The kind sympathetic Lady,
deep down inside,
I don't care for the topping;
this isn't Pizza Hut.

Your the most wonderful sight,
I've seen the pass week.
You couldn't be more.

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freeand2sexy
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1 posted 2009-09-22 10:38 PM


Aw, I thought this was sweet, I wish a guy would say this to me!

Keep up the good writing, can't wait to read more.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2009-09-23 05:17 AM


awww soo sweet
Ravagence
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3 posted 2009-09-25 03:32 PM


Awww, don't worry, I bet some guy will someday. But I never said this to the girl...Probably never will. Every once and then I'll drop a poem for her in her locker anonymously. My friends say I'm too shy.

UPDATE: She says she doesn't like this kind of stuff...Looks like I have to figure something else out...

[This message has been edited by Ravagence (09-26-2009 03:09 PM).]

priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
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india
4 posted 2009-09-26 05:45 PM


Aww...such a sweet thought... I wish too that someone said that to me!
Nice poem...
Yes, you are being shy...
The girl is very lucky to be loved by you...
You should 'fess up you know...
You never know...it may all out turn right...
Good luck

freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12
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5 posted 2009-09-26 06:08 PM


Wait, ur saying she doesn't like poetry?

too bad!

you'll either figure out another way, or find some other (better) girl.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

Ravagence
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since 2009-08-16
Posts 79

6 posted 2009-09-27 07:05 PM


Yeah, anyone who doesn't like poetry isn't worth it :P Nah, she's perfect, she said she hates the "lovie dovie" stuff...So how can I show my love through poetry if I can't do it that way ? :P I dunno.
precious pearls
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since 2009-07-24
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7 posted 2009-09-28 09:33 PM


Wow.... I think you should read her some of your other poetry... you know something that isn't "lovie dovie" Though why any girl wouldn't melt at having a poem made about them is beyond me, but whatever. But yea, i think you shud totally tell her how you feel! I mean, i myself have liked guys but some of them didn't even know i existed, but whateva. Anyways, yeah, you'll never know unless you try.... oh! I know, get to see how she feels bout you first, then make ur move. If she seems interested enough, go for it! That's what I would do!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

precious pearls
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8 posted 2009-09-28 09:35 PM


Btw, fantastic poem! It was very kind and was as sweet as dove chocolate(my fav). Loved it!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

Ravagence
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since 2009-08-16
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9 posted 2009-09-29 03:16 PM


Thanks Pearls, I think your right about what I should do. I'll just keep on acting the same and when I know her feelings for sure; I'll pounce like a cat!

I thought of the idea that since she doesn't like "Lovie-Dovie" stuff, then maybe I could make it "Beautiful"? It was just a thought. Although I consider this to be "Beautiful".

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