Twilight - Taken By The Firing Squad

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Teen Poetry #9

Twilight - Taken By The Firing Squad

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-12-31 09:37 PM

Heya Guys, First Post In A While.. Writing's Got Dodgey.. Was just messing with some words n come up with this.. Thanks Zach for helping me a bit!!

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Twighlight

If you’re out there reading this
On a night that’s fading grey
A life will be taken skilfully
And it will be taken here today

As the day drew to a close
A man began to cry
He sat about the soiled edge
And prayed he didn’t have to die

His message wasn’t one of hope
Nor that one ofjoy
The angel’s didn’t have the words
To help him fill the void

So solemnly he held his head
And fought back the poisoned tears
For twilight had awoken him
He’d been expecting this for years

You see he wasn’t needed here
Bought more harm than good
Took the lives of innocents
And any children that he could

The angels stood for one last time
As the blood washed down the shore
Another life just gone to waste
Another memory to mourn

And in a grave they made themselves
They laid that man to rest
Propped up by a leaf or two
They laid the bullet on his chest

But printed on the headstone
In words faded black
“Taken by the firing squad”
He aint never coming back..

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2009-01-01 09:16 PM

Wow this is really powerful! I love this - its really sad but theres such an eloquence about it and such a matter a fact way in which its said\worded. What inspired this if anything?Glad to see you back!
Rhia

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2009-01-02 04:13 PM

Like I said before Jess. This is a great poem. But personally it wasn't my favorite. Glad to be of any help in this masterpiece..

-Zach

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2009-01-03 07:04 AM

Thanks Guys,

Um Well to be honest rhia i was mucking around with words then i saw some doco on the bali terrorst that just recently got executed.. and thats how it turned out :P

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

4 posted 2009-03-20 08:59 AM

'The angels stood for one last time
As the blood washed down the shore
Another life just gone to waste
Another memory to mourn'

I liked this stanza best but they were all good

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