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Teen Poetry #9

Eyes,

Ravagence
Member

since 2009-08-16

Posts 79

0 posted 2009-09-07 12:20 PM

Your eyes,
take me back a million years,
To the time we talked.
Or so it seems.

Your eyes swallow me whole,
Seeking my differences,
turning them good.
Like stars, they glitter.

Shining forever,
hidden behind your hair.
Though that can't stop me from seeing them,
They shine in the night's air.

Empty air in front of us,
Is filled with your beauty.
Filling it like the smell of roses,
filling the garden.

You know how I feel,
you know what I want.
What I need.
What I am.

For Nuin-Tara, Best friend ever.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2009-09-07 02:29 PM

What an icredibly beautiful tribute to a friend.

Alison

heartofsteel
Junior Member

since 2009-09-07

Posts 13
Oregon, USA

2 posted 2009-09-07 10:46 PM

i enjoyed this!
your detail was great but try using wider vocabulary it will help!
Keep writing!

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2009-09-10 07:51 PM

beautiful

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