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Emi<3Naruto =]
Junior Member

since 2009-09-05

Posts 32

0 posted 2009-09-06 01:33 PM

I dont want to hold your hand from across the table,
I want to hold it from the seat right next to me.

I dont't want to watch you give your time to everyone but me,
I want to be with you every second of every day.

I dont want to be a thought that rarely enters your mind,
I want to be your first thought when you wake up and your last thought before you go to sleep, as you are mine.

I don't want a stranger to wonder if we're dating,
I want them to know we're in love as soon as they see our faces.

I don't want to feel a million miles away from you,
I want to be as close as if we were connected.

I don't want to be just another person,
I want to be your best friend.

I don't want to have seperate minds,
I want to share the same thoughts.

I don't want an extreme but empty gesture,
I want a little thing that's filled with meaning.

I dont want to just be told the words "i love you",

I want to hear it in your voice,
I want to feel it in your touch,
I want to see it in your eyes,
I want to know from everything you do...

Show me you love me.

Emi<3Naruto =]
Junior Member

since 2009-09-05

Posts 32

1 posted 2009-09-06 09:46 PM

I'd just like to let everyone know that in the line where I say "I want to feel it in your touch" i do mean things like hand holding and hugging.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2009-09-10 08:03 PM

i think we all got the meaning

nice poem i liked the way you wrappedup the ending. constructive critique» try making the lines all the same length near the same amount of syllables to increase the flow. Welcome to Passions and hope to read more
Krysti

madelyn
Member

since 2009-09-03

Posts 172
Purgatory

3 posted 2009-09-11 06:56 AM

Very Beautiful.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2009-09-11 08:43 AM

well done~~

I only suggest that you really do want to have seperate minds

"I don't want to have seperate minds,"

but can share some of the same thoughts... having much in common.

You wouldn't want to be exactly the same as another because there would be no excitement and growth in the relationship.

Otherwise I think I couldn't have said it any better...what loving is all about.

M

Emi<3Naruto =]
Junior Member

since 2009-09-05

Posts 32

5 posted 2010-01-28 01:34 AM

thx for the comments u guys

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