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youll never make it
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youll never make it |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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tell me your intentions with the greatest of care forget about the details, why are you here is there another line of lies for me to eat up and waste my life for six more months you show up for the fist time in weeks at three a.m. when im trying to sleep with another excuse for me to believe why you would leave but i dont care because the scars are too deep resentment shows more with every breath you breath so turn around walk the fifteen miles home because it just so happens i lost my phone.... (ring ring) "hold on this call is important i have to take this you better start walking or you'll never make it" |
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precious pearls Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110NJ; United States |
I liked it... it was very emotional and you had a definite fervor to your words... The only thing is that I didn't get that last part.. you said "you better start walking or you'll never make it" maybe i'm just having one of my moments and being thick, but i didn't get that... Otherwise, touching and passionate poem!! All of your stuff like that, you shud try getting them published too! Always, |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
its talking about sending her home...kind of rudely. i wrote it about my ex. |
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