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Wired To The Moon
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Wired To The Moon |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
It's been a while. Enjoy. Wired To The Moon Fingers kiss the splintered rungs And with the finest strings I’m strung To the peace and to the tune I’m wired to the moon Spattered stars crunch underfoot Studded to the shyest soot Sky fumbles with the pale shape Of silvered sphere that begs to drape It’s silken pattern of noiseless grace Across the milky, molten face Of a blanket of dizzy rings That wind around the shattered wings That blind the meekest faintest star Smiling from the blackest tar Which shroud the silence and spinning spheres Soaking up the mirrors tears Eyes reflect the harrowed face Of a man who sits and dares not race As threads of gold do trail down And fix themselves to papered crown Sparks wind down and through my blood As hoary light begins to flood Down onto me and onto land As fragmented glass dares hold my hand Fingers kiss the splintered rungs And with the finest strings I’m strung All too late and all too soon I’m wired to the moon. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
This is Awesome! The hardest part about writing poetry, |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Thank you very much. (: |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
i always get so engrossed in your poems, the imagery you use is so captivating and beautiful. great write  -Lee |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Wow. Your writing ability surprises me every time I read your work. This was amazing! I wish I had half of your talent. Great job. -Zach |
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UNTAMEDelegance Member
since 2009-05-30
Posts 222Oregon |
This is a wonderful poem! I found myself quickly falling into the quiksilver mysteries of the moon's grace; surrenduring to the beauty of the poem you've created. I loved it. It has rhythm, it has rhyme, and an enchanting elegance that rapidly draws you into its words. Awesome Job!=^.^= ~UNTAMEDelegance |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
It must be lovely to be wired to such genius. Loved the imagery and the so-close-to-raw-I-can-smell-it feel. Thanks for it all. There is power in the pen. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I thought this was a very interesting piece of writing. I'm not sure that I understand all of it, or that I'll ever be able too, but I loved the imagery. I did find a couple spots that didn't ring true to the rest of the poem, or at least to my ear. Though, I'm just some random person who thinks they know something. The parts I stumbled over while reading aloud was "Sky fumbles with the pale shape” S2, L3, and “Down onto me and onto land” S6, L3. For some reason these two lines made my tongue stumble as if they were misplaced. The rhythm was lost in these two particular spots for me. The title was unique and definitely caught my eye. I'm glad I took the time to read it, because it was well worth the time spent. You did an excellent job. It was a very enjoyable poem to read. I am looking forward to seeing more of your work! Thanks for sharing. Stargal |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
loved this your poems always have an enjoyable flow.. Krysti |
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Octave Member
since 2008-07-29
Posts 186Highlands, Scotland. |
Thank you so much everyone. It means a lot to me to hear all your lovely comments. (: |
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