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freeand2sexy
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0 posted 2009-07-19 05:14 PM



I think I still need to work on the ending, so let me know what you think.


Memories migrate into my thoughts.
They bring the childhood
Where sliced lemons were doused in salt,
And boundary lines were thin,
So that even with the screams and stings
Of our chapped lips,
The sour excitement
Was still sucked out.

It left us parched
And not yet satisfied, so

We skipped on slippery grass,
Felt rain drops scamper down
The scaly skin
Of our elbows,
And felt the freeing cold,
As a mom was on the edge,
Panicking yet again,
That we could simply, hit our heads.

We were not attentive
To her fear,
Fearless, until

We heard the keys upon worn out jeans,
Of a man,
Who smiled a bit too big
And whistled a little too loud,
And as he came near
We ran, paranoid
By the stories we were told,
Of men kidnapping kids
Who were yet again to be seen,
So we avoided the smiling man
And his worn out jeans.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

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1 posted 2009-07-19 05:20 PM


Pretty damned good job Christine .  I would write more but just have to get some sleep.  Maybe tomorrow.  Well done.
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2 posted 2009-07-20 10:42 AM


Wow Christina. I couldn't even write something like this. It's really good and one of my favorites. I really love the first stanza over all.
freeand2sexy
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3 posted 2009-07-20 08:58 PM


Thanks!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

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