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Love_Skull
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since 2008-07-15
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0 posted 2009-06-30 07:00 PM


I wont let go
I've known that since the start
But i want to let you know
What your in for from my part

All ive been through
Everything is wrong
But just to let yu know, to
Life will go on

You'll get through the sadness
You'll get through the pain
But you will eventually get through this
Though it might not end as quickly as it came

Whatever in your life that happened to go wrong
I know you'll pull through
Because life will go on
You just have to figure out how to get through it all, to

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I think im going to write more of this poem, but i cant think of what to write next right know. i  really hope you like it and i will take any criticism that you want to write.

Leah Stonis



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priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
Posts 216
india
1 posted 2009-07-03 07:29 AM


A good write it is... But if you would be kind enough to explain the line-"What your in for from my part"
And also... It would be nice if you could go a little deeper into the poem... like maybe describe what exactly it is that you have been through... And also what it is that makes you'll go seperate ways...If im not wrong is that what you mean-going your own ways?

Love_Skull
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since 2008-07-15
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2 posted 2009-07-21 12:57 PM


what i meant when i said "what your in for from my part" was whats coming from me. what made us go our separate ways was that she died, my cousin.
priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
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india
3 posted 2011-10-03 07:20 PM


This might be too late for a reply, but saw your post just now. Havn't here for a while. I'm sorry for loss. Hope you doing fine now. Take care.
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