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True Love |
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broken_smile1469 Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104
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Its inexplicable, I don’t know what to say Its like, I love you more than anything You take my breathe away. But there’s more than that, words can’t explain The butterflies I feel Everything is perfect Everything is real. You are the world to me I just can’t believe something like this Truly can exist, can it really be? Someone I’ve never met, someone I know so well Someone who I never want to be without Someone who has my heart, more than I could ever tell. I am in deeply in love.. Taken in by that smile and those eyes You capture me again.. I want to be with you Until the day I die. Its like I’m floating above the ground And never do I ever want to come down. You bring me so much ecstasy Never leave my side. Promise to be my husband And stay with me for the rest of our lives. "in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop" |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
Haha... This is cute. At first I was kinda rolling my eyes, but it's persistent innocence is contagious.  |
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lovelyswagg14 Junior Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 12Irvine,California |
I got confused at the part were you wrote "Someone I’ve never met" How could you not have met him? |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Cute. I know exactly how you feel. {~~*~~} Lacrimosa Dies Illa [Oh that tearful day] {~~*~~} |
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Kalysta Junior Member
since 2009-04-02
Posts 41Ohio |
I like the beginning,but the end needs some work. I think you should take the part about "be my husband" out. I dont think it fits and makes it seem kinda obsessive. ~Kalysta~ ~Kalysta~ |
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