Trapped Inside This Lullaby (I'm Your Daughter Not Your Mum)

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Teen Poetry #9

Trapped Inside This Lullaby (I'm Your Daughter Not Your Mum)

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2009-05-19 02:52 AM

This poem's dedicated to my NOT SO DARLING mother, who i returned home for.. (i've been travling) Seems's she's left my dad and got involved with an idiot who belts her up..

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Busted, Broken, Bare and Bleeding
This lullaby has copped a beating
Tangled, Tortured, Tattered, Torn
Another memory left to mourn

Sorry, Selfish, Sexist Lies
We all see past his disguise
Humour, Hatred, Horror, Hurt
I've watched him push you in the dirt

But mangled promises hold you fast
Trapped inside your wrongful past
So close your eyes and go to sleep
I'll dry the acid that you weep

The truth is that you'll never learn
With all these memories left to burn
For you'll be back tommorrow night
After all you'll never win this fight

So open up your precious eyes
Your living in a world of lies
Sheltered from the life you live
There's no more left of me to give

I'm done with all the sleepless nights
Cause your too scared to dim the lights
So this is it i guess i'm done
I'm too ashamed to call you mum

It's not my fault that you left dad
For some other guy that treats you bad
You made your bed and now you'll lie
Trapped inside this lullaby

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-05-19 12:50 PM

Library..

-Zach

I love my crayons. :D lol

kindredspirit
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since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

2 posted 2009-05-19 08:38 PM

-this poem is quite profound, and your emotions are portrayed clearly through very vivid imagery while telling her story.
-the rhythm is not quite perfect, but the rhyming is well done.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2009-05-20 06:38 PM

Breathtaking write Jess. I absolutely love it. I was thinking as I read it that it would sound great as a song too.
Just a thought.
hang in there,

Library

{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
{~~*~~}

Rosie_Orange
Junior Member

since 2009-04-20

Posts 46
South Africa

4 posted 2009-05-21 02:05 PM

honest and cutting edge! really well written!

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

5 posted 2009-06-09 09:26 AM

wow, chilled me Jess, completly. Gosh I've missed this place. It was beautiful, in a sad way. I love it, Library!

missed you bunches!

-Kate

"What are you!?"
"I'm complicated."

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

6 posted 2009-06-16 02:15 AM

really beautiful poem Jess, You always write with a haunting truth I love your work.

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

7 posted 2009-06-17 02:01 AM

OH MY GOODNESS!!!!
That was Amazing Revenge!
Best of luck with your mother...

My melancholy is purely my own

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