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dance floor dreams or nightmares
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dance floor dreams or nightmares |
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Rosie_Orange Junior Member
since 2009-04-20
Posts 46South Africa |
a smoky corner, away from strobe lights and loud music, sits a lonely figure, came to experience teenhood. if only she had one friend, to laugh, talk, drink with. instead, too scared to dance alone, a single tear falls, and is brushed away before make up is smudged. if only one person came to talk to her. Love, Peace, Chocolate *mmmmmm* |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
This is a very moving poem that expresses so well the feelings of isolation and loneliness many of us feel from time to time. Heart touching images in a well penned poem! |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
*point's at Jennifer* What she said. :P Lol This was really good emotions. Maybe more imagery? But over all really good.  -Zach I love my crayons. :D lol |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
This is a good poem but as Zach said I think it needs more imagery If your parents never had children, chances are you won't, either. |
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