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SOUR GRAPES
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois 
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Staring out the window Hiding within my mind Searching for an answer That I don't think I'll find. I'm starting to think That love isn't right for me There's not that "one person" that makes my weak in the knee's No lover to hold my heart A person to be with me to the end No that's not what I'm here for I don't need anything more then a friend. No matter how much I long for it No matter how many times I dream Relationships always start out fine but then tear at the seems I write out my feelings and I'm doing my best to cope But I'm starting to give up on it I'm starting to see there's no hope Love has forsaken me But in the end I don't really care I have a life to live I don't need someone to be there. [This message has been edited by Falling rain (01-08-2009 09:07 PM).] |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Falling Rain, considering that this is the teen poetry forum, aren't you much to young for these thoughts? What if I told you that I am 36 and just found the one last year? But you have the heart of a poet and emotions you'll live and explore. Here's what I think is the perfect title for your poem: SOUR GRAPES. You explored the feelings well, and I think such a title with enhance your poem. Have a marvelous day. And keep writing  Mark |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
First off, call me Zach. I don't like using my formal user name. lol. Second of all, Yes "Sour Grapes" sums up the poem quite nicely. And yeah everyone has their "sour moments" and I guess I was just in one of those moods. lol I know its not hopless but I was just in one of those moods I guess. Thanks for reading and for the title suggestion! -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
You're welcome Zach Of course we have those moods...otherwise much good poetry would be lost Take care, Mark |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
i absoulutely love this poem, and dearly miss reading ur work. keep on keeping on, !tracey! if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
wow! i love this one! you did an excellent job with the wording and the flow of it, amazing job once again. library! (and i know how your feeling sometimes) .:~]Julianna[~:. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
ahww Zach hunni amazing loved this =) Krysti |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Seriously dude, this is like...the second best poem you've ever written. I love it. and even tho you haven't found someone yet, that doesn't mean that they're not out there. You've still got many years to live my friend. Maybe time is the best solution to this one....? Hope you find ur answer. [library.] {~~*~~} Emmalee Janelle {~~*~~} [This message has been edited by XxForever.BrokenxX (01-14-2009 12:21 AM).] |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
I am glad Mark told you that these thoughts were too aged for you. Now I don't have to say the same thing. Lol... Hope is always there even if you say something is hopeless in the back of your mind you always have slight hope. Those moods come and go a lot huh? I get them all the time. |
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