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Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

0 posted 2009-04-24 09:56 AM

I feel it all slipping away
Slipping through my fingers,
Gripping at the cool air
In which your spirit lingers.

My memory is beginning to fade
You’re but a silhouette in my mind,
The finer features disappearing
Screaming to be refined.

I can only just remember
The last time I saw your face,
The confusion in your eyes
Set you in a different place.

Now all I have is your photo
Tucked safe inside my purse,
It helps me through the pain
of seeing your shiny hearse.

Do you hear my voice at night?
As I talk to my bedroom ceiling,
Telling you all my fears and dreams
While my spirit begins it’s healing.

I know you’re not here today
To share this life with me,
But I hear your voice in the breeze
And your heartbeat in the sea.

Your love’s forever around me
Looking after my soul;
It guides me through the dark
And returns me heart to whole.

Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved…there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years – Thomas Har

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2009-04-24 11:40 AM

Sorry for you loss. Good write.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2009-04-26 09:22 PM

This is a really good write,
and i know Exactly how you feel.

Stay strong,

{~~*~~}

Emmalee Janelle
{~~*~~}

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

3 posted 2009-04-27 04:54 PM

Very good poem. Sounds like something I would write. Keep writing hon.

Sorry for your loss.

-Zach

We all flirt with the tiniest notion of self-conclusion in one simple motion.

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

4 posted 2009-04-28 03:26 AM

thank you all for your comments
im glad you enjoyed it.
xx

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

5 posted 2009-05-15 01:02 PM

i absolutly love this. there's just something about it that seems really familiar, i just can't point it out.
great job on this.
library.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

nehematala
Member

since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

6 posted 2009-05-21 04:52 PM

this poem really hits home. Its a really good one though

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

Zaineb
Junior Member

since 2009-05-22

Posts 27
Denmark

7 posted 2009-05-22 10:17 AM

It is really good, you can understand the pain and it is impossible to ignore, because it seem so familiar that you just want to read more of it.

kindredspirit
Member

since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

8 posted 2009-06-08 04:30 PM

well written, intense, and touching.

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