To my One and Only, whoever he may be.

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Teen Poetry #9

To my One and Only, whoever he may be.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

0 posted 2009-04-10 04:10 AM

(Meant to be read slowly)

We know what this is

Bubbling, and you know what it is.
Shaking, your nerves start to twitch.
It leaps from one moment to the next.
It's all around me, and I sense it.

Thinking…thinking…
Yet without those…huh?
Yeah, those thoughts.
Distracted, by screaming,
Shouting,
I hear you, stop yelling,
I know what it is.

A jolt, a push and a shove.
It quakes my life
It's, it's…
Yes, I know what it is.

Fluttering, you know what it means.
Soothing, you can't move, anything.
It's never what it seems, is it?
Is it meant to fill me like this?

Breathing…but barely,
As I'm sinking,
Sinking…
Until there's nothing,
But everything,
You.

Our finger tips touch,
Our eyes,
Reveal it all.
Breathing...breathing...
Then our lips…

We know what this is.

"I can't see my forehead!" -Patrick

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-04-10 11:03 AM

I really like this. It does sound better when you read it slow. Very good.

-Zach

We all flirt with the tiniest notion of self-conclusion in one simple motion.

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

2 posted 2009-04-10 03:44 PM

Thank you, when I wrote at 1 in the morning, I really liked it, now not so much. I think it's okay, but not as good as I thought it was.

"I can't see my forehead!" -Patrick

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

3 posted 2009-04-20 08:55 AM

You have some of the weirdest quotes as signatures lol

I honestly loved this!! Nothing about it seemed boring to me.

Loved it absolutely loved it lol lol Sorry, hyper...

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

4 posted 2009-04-20 01:07 PM

lol, thanks!!!

Yeah the quotes are kinda weird

"Do you smell it? That smell. A kind of smelly smell.
The smelly smell that smells... smelly." -Mr. Krabs

[This message has been edited by freeand2sexy (04-20-2009 04:14 PM).]

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