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Teen Poetry #9

The end of our chapter

benjamenbutton09
New Member

since 2009-01-02

Posts 4

0 posted 2009-03-27 09:08 PM

The end of our chapter(it's time to move on)
I stand here today
Looking at your face
I see the person that I loved
As I walk away
I wish we could have just been friends
instead of ending it like this today
But it's too late
This relationship has to end
I'll miss you

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

1 posted 2009-03-30 01:56 PM

I can seriously relate to this.

Nice write!

"I can't see my forehead!" -Patrick

lovelyswagg14
Junior Member

since 2009-05-17

Posts 12
Irvine,California

2 posted 2009-05-17 03:48 PM

Im serious i went through this situation exactly
I like it

)

Kalysta
Junior Member

since 2009-04-02

Posts 41
Ohio

3 posted 2009-05-17 09:59 PM

I think this is a good poem, but i think you could make it great by adding a little character to it. Its good but not great like i think you could make it great. Good start. Sorry if i seem harsh. Its just what i think. Keep writing.
~Kalysta~

~Kalysta~

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