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benjamenbutton09
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since 2009-01-02
Posts 4


0 posted 2009-03-27 09:08 PM



The end of our chapter(it's time to move on)
I stand here today
Looking at your face
I see the person that I loved
As I walk away
I wish we could have just been friends
instead of ending it like this today
But it's too late
This relationship has to end
I'll miss you



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freeand2sexy
Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704
CA, USA
1 posted 2009-03-30 01:56 PM


I can seriously relate to this.

Nice write!

"I can't see my forehead!" -Patrick

lovelyswagg14
Junior Member
since 2009-05-17
Posts 12
Irvine,California
2 posted 2009-05-17 03:48 PM


Im serious i went through this situation exactly
I like it
)

Kalysta
Junior Member
since 2009-04-02
Posts 41
Ohio
3 posted 2009-05-17 09:59 PM


I think this is a good poem, but i think you could make it great by adding a little character to it. Its good but not great like i think you could make it great. Good start. Sorry if i seem harsh. Its just what i think. Keep writing.
~Kalysta~

~Kalysta~

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