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Teen Poetry #9

Diary Entry #2

GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

0 posted 2009-03-16 10:30 PM

Second plea in games of lust
drowns the first of pleas for trust.
Far from fair instants, delights.
Stupid girl: afraid of night.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-03-17 07:51 AM

"Second plea in game the of lust
drowns the first of pleas for trust.
Far from fair instant delights.
Stupid girl: afraid of what's right."

I liked this but I had to re-write it in the way I would of said it. But its still good the way you said it.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

2 posted 2009-03-17 08:20 AM

The way I said it had to deal with how my ex made me do a lot of stuff with him when I didn't want to. Long story. Just a vent.

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

3 posted 2009-03-17 04:31 PM

wow. thats about all i can say.

Octave
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since 2008-07-29

Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.

4 posted 2009-03-18 01:04 PM

I agree with Clockwork. This is amazing. Short but...sweet?

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

5 posted 2009-03-22 01:02 PM

Again, with the awesomeness.

So amazing, as usual.

Cierra

GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

6 posted 2009-03-22 01:44 PM

Thanks

Dark Star
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since 2008-02-20

Posts 392
Lost in your eyes

7 posted 2009-03-22 07:53 PM

says a lot in such little amounts, nice

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