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my wish |
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kiwie15:D Junior Member
since 2009-03-05
Posts 13california |
i wish there were no violance i don't think there's a point to it people think its cool but all it takes is just one hit i want to make a difference i want the world to see another side of me i hear and see the stories i know how it all starts just one little comment and then there's no part sometimes i think that people don't hear or mean what they are saying because at the end they are the ones paying it's sad how people dont understand how not only they hurt themselves that they hurt everyone else i want the world to change even if it's just a little the world doesn't have to be so brittle this is the end i hope you care i can understand if you just can't bare |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
A lot of this is true. I'd like to say just one thing. It's much easier to read a poem when it uses capital letters at the beginning of thoughts and puctuation where needed. Just a suggestion. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
I have to agree with Michaela here, but I'm sure there are people who would disagree with us. Nice poem! With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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kiwie15:D Junior Member
since 2009-03-05
Posts 13california |
Thank you and i will try that.  |
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