Teen Poetry #9 |
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The Princess and the Phoenix (A poem for a much missed friend) |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England ![]() |
SEA's gonna kill me for posting in this forum as I'm 22, but this is for a very dear friend whom I hope will return to us to read this. Don't leave us Emily. A princess of old raised a wooden pyre Before the temple of the sun, Believed that the flames would take her higher And divinity would be won. Her people looked on in solemn sorrow As she knelt with the brazen torch But none dared protest, they simply followed As the timber began to scorch. She disrobed and bared her skin to the flames and swam a goddess in the light, The hungering blaze seemed to call her name As it roared it's savage delight. Yet amongst the crowd there was one who cried For the loved one he held so dear, Into desolate ash he did confide A wellspring of grief ridden tears. From the tears of his heart life grew anew, The goodwill of gods was assured, In crimson rapture a scarlet light flew A phoenix to the heavens soared. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Falling rain![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Okay first thing this is really good. And second you made a few mistakes with your rhyming. ![]() -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Thank you Luke this is amazing. I thought i replied to it already but i guess i didn't. i printed it out and i think im gunna put it up somewhere in my room. Again, thank you. This is beautiful. {~~*~~} Emmalee Janelle |
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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
This is a great poem, Suncleaver. I just wish that I wouldn't have sent the cd for my poetry book in so early. But anyway, sorry that I couldn't publish your work and keep on writing. So cut me into pieces and tape me into something beautiful... |
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