When I'm Gone.... There's No Heartbeat For The Broken!

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Teen Poetry #9

When I'm Gone.... There's No Heartbeat For The Broken!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2009-02-24 05:46 AM

I'm not sure if this is confusing if it's sorry.. i'd explain what it's about but it's just too long of a story lol.. It's crappy.. I CAN'T WRITE AT ALL ANYMORE!... SO HERE IT IS..

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When I die do not mourn
For I have not left at all
I am the warmth in the summer
And the breeze in the fall

When I die do not bury me
For the worms won’t like the taste
Scatter my ashes in the Aussie wind
So my beauty won’t be a waste

When I die do not fear
For I will always be the same
Laughing, crying, smiling
Dancing in the rain

When I die I’ll die happily
For I am the girl you once loved
The angel of your big blue eyes
I am more than flesh and blood

When I die there will be no battles
For I was never yours at all
I may have gave you everything
But you gave me nothing at all

When I die there will be no crying
Only promises of what’s left to come
You broke me into a million pieces
But i'm not leaving you with one

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-02-24 08:06 AM

It isn't that confusing. But not your best work.

Don't give up hope hon.

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 422
Canada

2 posted 2009-02-24 08:17 PM

well...tsk tsk for thinking it was confusing.
i understood it completely and i loved it, all of it.
library.

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

3 posted 2009-02-25 12:16 PM

Long time, I haven't been online in forever,
missed you writing

This was really well written, the last stanza added a twist to the poem.

Can't write anymore? rubbish!
Not your best, but you never fair to disappoint.

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

4 posted 2009-03-03 08:48 AM

You can too write still...

I really enjoyed this...

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