Teen Poetry #9 |
garden of light |
purefiction New Member
since 2009-02-17
Posts 1Florida |
Garden of needles bloom and stab native vegetation. Light rays reflect off thin shards squinting gray eyes of guilty bystanders as they collapse, fertilizing innocent soil. Keen edges breach the earth rising to the face of man to sew chapped lips. Their muffled voices impair responses to my questions as I sprint above the surface of sharp edges. No sin to weigh my body down to a porous sponge. Floating alone, the needles grow and warp, upholstering the earth apart, cross-stitching breathing bodies into a fantastic quilt. Nothing strong enough to cut through roots that strangle the core. The world seizes it's rotation; blinding other worlds. -Alex |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Hey! Welcome to Piptalk. I really like your imagery in this poem! You paint a pretty picture. Keep it up! -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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freeand2sexy Senior Member
since 2008-09-12
Posts 704CA, USA |
Wow, you have very good imagery in your poem. "No sin to weigh my body down" This is my favorite line. Oh and welcome to Pip!!! With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
loved the ending...very nicely done Welcome to Pip *please check your email for a special greeting! |
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