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hangelgirl
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since 2013-01-01
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0 posted 2013-01-01 02:45 PM



I love u with all my heart,
Even though we're a thousand miles apart.
I dream as we walk,
My heart stops when we talk.
I dont know how u r a thousand miles away,
And still make this smile come a million times a day.
When we talk u make my heart race,
And it goes in such a fast pace.
U really do have that special love,
That is only found from far far above.
Please leave a comment and tell me what u think.


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HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2013-04-30 01:39 AM


Welcome to pip!

Ahh... love poetry, RHYMING love poetry, no less: my old favorite style!  Once I got passed the "txt spk" (old pet peeve, so don't mind me) I realized that this was very nicely done!  The rhyme scheme worked well here, although trying to keep the syllable count more even line to line will help improve flow.  Hope to see more from you!

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