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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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i can hear your dreams whispered in my ears every fantasy of anywhere but here far away from this place is where you want to be and i cant give you the mountains i cant give you the sky i can only tell you i love you untill the day i die i cant give you the world hell i cant give you a ride i dont know what you see in me but girl you make me happy |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Very honest and unlike myself, very straightforward. I really liked the little twist at the end. It brought a sense of closure. (This is hard for me sometimes.) There is power in the pen. |
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GothicCherry Member
since 2008-09-16
Posts 471TN |
WHOA!! I read this once and liked it. I read through it again and enjoed it even more. Then, I looked over it once more and the feelings pulsed through me even though it was written plainly and straight-forward. I think that's what made me love it actually. Keep writing so I may keep reading. lol...  |
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